小木马

• BadzMaro

  30 Apr 08, 11:28

  this is givingm  me an idea... lol

  borrowed idea.

• newcomer

  30 Apr 08, 11:28

  please share!

• Mospeada

  30 Apr 08, 11:32

  u all enjoy huh...

  going back to work liao

• nehpyh

  30 Apr 08, 11:33

  Feelings are always the same...same old feelings..so how to have new feelings right?? But literary expression can be creative...

   

  That's why, dun use words to simply describe the feelings...use the words to paint an image or scenario to suggest that feeling...this way, the lyrics will be more tangible.

  E.g.

  I feel pain, hurts like hell

  Alternative:

  I feel pain, cuts like a knife

• meltz

  30 Apr 08, 11:34

  �悔当��开你的手 没有陪你走完下辈�

• TehJarVu

  30 Apr 08, 11:35

  simi lan

• nehpyh

  30 Apr 08, 11:38

  Sibei many alternative ending riaos....

  Anyone with verses?

• Midlusionz

  30 Apr 08, 11:41

  Ni wo zhi jian de tian mi   Zhi neng zhai mong ni hui wei

• meltz

  30 Apr 08, 11:42

  Originally posted by meltz:

  �悔当��开你的手 没有陪你走完下辈�

   

  this is Verse 2 leh .. i miss out a � .. add in a few more words also :lol: .... hahha crap

  �悔当��开你的手 没有陪你走完下�辈� 让你一个人孤�寂寞

• nehpyh

  30 Apr 08, 11:44

  Originally posted by meltz:

   

  this is Verse 2 leh .. i miss out a � .. add in a few more words also :lol: .... hahha crap

  �悔当��开你的手 没有陪你走完下�辈� 让你一个人孤�寂寞

  Orh paisay....will amend it...

  Need more images....premises....scenarios...analogies...

• BadzMaro

  30 Apr 08, 11:47

  i have all these 詞 and 曲 in my head.

  But just thinking about it makes me feel lame and stupid with all these very lame lyrics. Not lame , as in touchy sad.. sappy typical of Chinese song lyrics..

  But anyways , å°�木马 so far the combined lyrics or alternatives given has not yet related to the å°�木马. Maybe i am thinking too abstract ? In a sense where  the song relates or revolves around å°�木马.  This has to be a very 童年 de 爱.. unless.. UNLESS..

  The song is about how the girl now , which u know before... and in your dreams u always have that sweet memory during ur childhood days. And well. i suppose centered around the �木马. And that how u can have her , or u still love her.. or u dunno where she is.. yada yada.. endings... or she died of cancer. lol.. n the best memory of someone is at the height of thier innocence during the childhood days... or how. lol.
  

  Unless your �木马 is a metaphor a deep meaning that i am not told and aware about.
  

   

• Midlusionz

  30 Apr 08, 11:48

  Zhou guo shou xi de jie shang .. xiang qi na shi de xin tong ? =x

• nehpyh

  30 Apr 08, 11:57

  Originally posted by BadzMaro:

  i have all these 詞 and 曲 in my head.

  But just thinking about it makes me feel lame and stupid with all these very lame lyrics. Not lame , as in touchy sad.. sappy typical of Chinese song lyrics..

  But anyways , å°�木马 so far the combined lyrics or alternatives given has not yet related to the å°�木马. Maybe i am thinking too abstract ? In a sense where  the song relates or revolves around å°�木马.  This has to be a very 童年 de 爱.. unless.. UNLESS..

  The song is about how the girl now , which u know before... and in your dreams u always have that sweet memory during ur childhood days. And well. i suppose centered around the �木马. And that how u can have her , or u still love her.. or u dunno where she is.. yada yada.. endings... or she died of cancer. lol.. n the best memory of someone is at the height of thier innocence during the childhood days... or how. lol.
  

  Unless your �木马 is a metaphor a deep meaning that i am not told and aware about.
  

   

  Badz, good thinking...put it in words and let me place it in the song....you can shape the song...but you must word it right. Now, we are just brainstorming ideas and concept...it could turn radically....

  Write something! :)

• Midlusionz

  30 Apr 08, 12:01

  nehneh enthu lol

• BadzMaro

  30 Apr 08, 12:13

  Originally posted by nehpyh:

  Badz, good thinking...put it in words and let me place it in the song....you can shape the song...but you must word it right. Now, we are just brainstorming ideas and concept...it could turn radically....

  Write something! :)

  LoL my brain has so many ideas floating around. I am trying to determine what type to use. then the words.. simple and elegant.. or hard deep.. Jay Chou's Suan Jie Gun style lyrics.

  Anyways this com no chinese so cant type it out at the moment.

• Mospeada

  30 Apr 08, 15:48

  很想陪你一直走下去

  为了你，为了幸�, �使累了, 我也愿�

  �悔放开了你的手, 留下了空虚孤寂

• BadzMaro

  30 Apr 08, 15:49

  Originally posted by Mospeada:

  很想陪你一直走下去

  为了你，为了幸�, �使累了, 我也愿�

  lame...

  but i am sure the XMM's will love it. =P

• BadzMaro

  30 Apr 08, 15:51

  How much more cheese n corn will it need and take to make this piece of music become.... The Top Hitz.

• Mospeada

  30 Apr 08, 15:53

  Originally posted by BadzMaro:

  lame...

  but i am sure the XMM's will love it. =P

  so u are using it on xmm?

• Mospeada

  30 Apr 08, 16:00

  �木马

  è©ž: Ah Mos, Ah Meltz, Ah Neh, Ah Midz, Ah Cud (and counting...)

  曲: Ah Neh

   

  Verse 1: (set the premise - good memories)

  骑�童年熟悉的�木马 (ah mos)

  - - - - - - - - - -Remembering the good o'days with the ger??

  �稀梦里曾牵�你的手

  - - - - - - - - - -Describe the girl then, why you love her so?

  - - - - - - - - - -

   

  Chorus1: (the highlights)

  - - - - - - - - -

  - - - - - - - - -

  讓你和他�走高飛 (ah neh)

  騎著木馬的我��能留 (還) 在原地 (ah neh)

  Alternative ending 1:

  �木马�然熟悉, 对你的爱已慢慢淡去..... (ah meltz - amended by ah mos)
  

  Alternative ending 2:

  Dan ni yi jing bu zhai wo sheng bian, Jiao wo ru he qu mian dui (Ah Midz)

  Alternative ending 3:

  风轻轻的�� 雨细细的飘� 望�陈旧的�木马 �剩下你和我的回忆 (Ah Meltz)

  Alternative ending 4:

  chen jiu de mu ma qing qing de yao zhe, hui yi ye shui zhe xuan lu man man fu xian.

  wo xiang wang zhe dang nian wo men de nuo yan, jiu xiang tong nian tui mu ma de du ai (Ah Cud)

   

   

  Verse 2: (development)

  - - - - - - - - -What happeneded?

  - - - - - - - - -Describe the ger now? Why angry/fustrated, etc..?

  很想陪你一直走下去

  为了你，为了幸�, �使累了, 我也愿�

  �悔放开了你的手, 留下了空虚孤寂 (original ah meltz, amended by ah mos)

  纵使诉ä¸�完的相æ€�情    天涯也心若咫尺 (Ah Mos)

• Mospeada

  30 Apr 08, 16:11

  Originally posted by Mospeada:

  �木马

  è©ž: Ah Mos, Ah Meltz, Ah Neh, Ah Midz, Ah Cud (and counting...)

  曲: Ah Neh

   

  Verse 1: (set the premise - good memories)

  骑�童年熟悉的�木马 (ah mos)

  - - - - - - - - - -Remembering the good o'days with the ger??

  �稀梦里曾牵�你的手

  - - - - - - - - - -Describe the girl then, why you love her so?

  - - - - - - - - - -

   

  Chorus1: (the highlights)

  - - - - - - - - -

  - - - - - - - - -

  讓你和他�走高飛 (ah neh)

  騎著木馬的我��能留 (還) 在原地 (ah neh)

  Alternative ending 1:

  �木马�然熟悉, 对你的爱已慢慢淡去..... (ah meltz - amended by ah mos)

  微微风雨中, 陈旧�木马, 留下的�是片片的回忆 (ah meltz - amended by ah mos)

  Alternative ending 2:

  Dan ni yi jing bu zhai wo sheng bian, Jiao wo ru he qu mian dui (Ah Midz)

  Alternative ending 3:

  chen jiu de mu ma qing qing de yao zhe, hui yi ye shui zhe xuan lu man man fu xian.

  wo xiang wang zhe dang nian wo men de nuo yan, jiu xiang tong nian tui mu ma de du ai (Ah Cud)

   

   

  Verse 2: (development)

  - - - - - - - - -What happeneded?

  - - - - - - - - -Describe the ger now? Why angry/fustrated, etc..?

  很想陪你一直走下去

  为了你，为了幸�, �使累了, 我也愿�

  �悔放开了你的手, 留下了空虚孤寂 (original ah meltz, amended by ah mos)

  纵使诉ä¸�完的相æ€�情    天涯也心若咫尺 (Ah Mos)

   

• Mospeada

  30 Apr 08, 16:15

  can put this 2 together...

  �木马�然熟悉, 对你的爱已慢慢淡去..... (ah meltz - amended by ah mos)

  微微风雨中, 陈旧�木马, 留下的�是片片的回忆 (ah meltz - amended by ah mos)

• BadzMaro

  30 Apr 08, 16:15

  i am trying to imagine the MV ? but... to be honest.. its not very..mmm... lol..  can u imagine it ? lol!

  I keep having this image of �木马 , a swing , a little boy and a little girl.

  thats it. lol.. n lots of crying..

• BadzMaro

  30 Apr 08, 16:16

  Originally posted by Mospeada:

  so u are using it on xmm?

  u know xmms love this kind of lyrics. i know...

  lol

• Mospeada

  30 Apr 08, 16:17

  Originally posted by BadzMaro:

  i am trying to imagine the MV ? but... to be honest.. its not very..mmm... lol..  can u imagine it ? lol!

  I keep having this image of �木马 , a swing , a little boy and a little girl.

  thats it. lol.. n lots of crying..

  maybe can be those �木马 at those merry go round one leh...

  and both the boy and girl were still young...